A
big scary shocking dream
All I could
see were dry, Rocky Mountains on both sides of a never ending road! The lack of
trey tracks on the muddy path indicated that it had had no recent travellers. I
realized by then that I had in fact lost my way to the resort. I was sure my
friends were wondering where I was and were trying to reach me on my phone
which unfortunately no signal in the deserted place! The rumbling noises of the car engine was beginning
yo give me a headache.
“UFF! I am
driving from 3 hours and still I can’t find my way to the resort”. Suddenly a
bluish light flash came on my face and one terrific person came with a round
shape body. He has four eyes {two in front and two back}, one mouth and was
wearing a black pant. I was scared and my body was shivering. I asked “who are
you “. King of the desert answered the monster
“what king” . “Yes, I am the water man
and I help everyone who lost the ways.
I was whispering
and saying, can you help me, I am lost my way. Suddenly an angel came and takes
me and threw me in a river.
I was shocked
and suddenly a voice came chocolate! Chocolate!. And I fell down and said ouch
help me ,help me and my mom came and wake me up then I realized that it is a
bad dream.
“A big scary dream”
Edit your work based on the feedback given
ReplyDelete* The 'person' well described
ReplyDelete* 'round shaped'
* 'He had four eyes..'
* 'Who are you?'
* Check the inverted commas while using direct speech
* Well ended
Very creatively written Muskan - I can see that your reading is having a very positive influyence on your writing. :)